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JessMcK's avatar

Thrilling! You've captured the time period nicely too.

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Jennifer James's avatar

Thank you so much!

It's tough not to let the language wander into caricature when writing a period piece, so I'm glad this worked out.

Happy you enjoyed it. :)

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David B. Corder's avatar

I really like this. Stories like this have a particular style that just intrigue the reader and keeps them reading. I want to write more stuff like this when I get the time. Well done.

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Jennifer James's avatar

Also, thank you for the kind restack!

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Jennifer James's avatar

Truly generous words. Thank you, David! I also look forward to reading your work. Fantasy is a genre I love but find difficult to write. Those who do have my deep respect.

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Kathrine Elaine's avatar

Nice! Have you shared it on Macabre Monday? If not, you should!🩶

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Jennifer James's avatar

Thank you! I haven't, but I plan to this Monday. And I appreciate the restack.

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Jim J Wilsky's avatar

Great job of writing here, Jennifer. Really enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing. - Jim

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Jennifer James's avatar

Thank you for reading, Jim! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Jean McKinney's avatar

Wowza. This is really good. Chilling and kind of comical all at the same time. I love how you managed to work in so much back story without slowing down the action.

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Jennifer James's avatar

Thank you! I credit my college professors and Flannery O'Connor for the pacing. "Every word for a reason."

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